Sunday, 28 May 2017

Heart vs Brain - Chapter 1

             Hey guys wondering where i disappeared? Kisi ne CID ko toh nahi bula liya na! Nahi bulayega hoga and that's why they are still not here searching for me. Nahi toh our beloved CID team doesn't take this long to find someone. I was actually working on a new idea! An idea to write stories, obviously about CID! What do you guys think about it? Should I write or no? To make your choice easy am presenting before you all my first work of fiction.

                                Chapter 1

            Standing on the shore he was staring at the vast sea... Moon shining bright in the sky between the crowd of stars... Waves touching his feat and returning back into the ocean... Cool breeze making his silky hair messy but he seemed least interested in setting them back... The only thing that was disturbing the silence of the night was the sound of the waves but they were incapable of disturbing his thoughts... Motionless he was standing there, his face showing no expressions but only he knew what feelings he was going through... His usually intense eyes were filled with pain tonight... His courageous heart was filled with guilt and his sharp brain failed to find a way out of it... Suddenly his brain started to play some of the most beautiful memories of his life

"Jab tak tera yeh dost zinda hai na koi goli tumhe chu bhi nahi sakti"

"Dost toh hum bhi hai tumhare, hume toh kabhi koi gift nahi diya"

"Agar zarurt pade toh yaad karna, dost nahi bhai hu tumahara"

"Tum na apne poto ko apne darwaze todne ki kahaniya zarur sunana... Aree tum kya mai sunauga"

"Abhijeet tum mujh par kabhi goli chala hi nahi sakte"

            Those smiles, those laughs that they had together... The bullets and that anger that they beared for each other... Those eyes he couldn't see pain in and that man for whom he could fight the whole world... His friend who was more precious than his own life for him... These memories which were his most valuable possession were nothing else but the reason why his heart ached today... He remembered his face, his bestie's, his Daya's face and the smile which used to bring a smile on his face brought tears in his eyes today... A tear rolled down his left eye on his cheek and it brought him back from his thoughts... He stared at the watch in his hand not to see the time but because it was his brother's only sign with him... Brother's?! Yes brother's! He was much more than a brother to him... He moved his hand on that watch slowly, feeling his Daya's presence in it... He remembered why and how this watch reached him

                             *Flashback*
(Abhijeet and Daya were arguing over something... Meanwhile Freedy came in between)

Freedy - Kya hua sir? App dono jaghad kyu rahe hai?

Daya - Yeh abhijeet ki wajh se!

Abhijeet - Meri wajh se kya! Maine kya kiya? Apna wada tum todo and galti meri! Yeh kaha ka insaf hai

Daya - Toh tumne cheating ki thi!!!

Abhijeet - Aree maine konsi cheating ki! Shart tum haar gaye aur ab tumhe apna wada pura karna he padega

Daya - Dekho abhijeet... (Started daya)

Freedy - Sir koi mujhe batayega ki konsi shart? Kaisi shart?

Abhijeet - Achaa theek hai chalo ab freedy hi decide karega ki kon sahi hai aur kon galat

Daya - Okk... Done

Abhijeet - Dekho freedy, hua yeh ki maine aur daya ne shart lagayi thi ki ajj ACP sir beauro mai kharab mood se ayege... Mai keh raha tha kharab mood se ayege and daya bol raha tha nahi ayege... Aur ajj ACP sir ka mood subah se khaarb hi hai... Matlab mai shart jeet gaya!

Freedy - Haa toh sir isme problem kya hai?

Abhijeet - Problem yeh hai ki daya manne ko tayar hi nahi hai ki woh har gaya

Freedy - Kyu sir?

Daya - Kyuki freedy, subah ACP sir ne mujhe phone kiya tha kuch kaam se aur woh kafi ache mood mai the, isliye maine kaha ki ACP sir achee mood mai ayege... Ab ACP sir ki DCP sir ke saath meeting hai beauro ane se pehle yeh mujhe kya pata!!! Us DCP ne ACP sir ka mood kharab kar diya hoga hamesha ki tarah!

Abhijeet - Toh isme meri kya galti ki tumhe nahi pata... Baat bas itni hai ki tum shart haar gaye

Daya - Freedy ab tum hi batao kaun sahi hai kaun galat!

Freedy - Sorry daya sir but abhijeet sir shart jeet gaye

Abhijeet - Dekha! Chalo ab shart mutabik mujhe apni woh new ghadi do

(Daya removed his watch and gave it to Abhijeet)

Daya - Lo! Freedy tumhe toh mai dekh lunga baadme
                         *Flashback ends*

          Remembering that one of the many sweet and salty fights he smiled... Smiled with tears in his eyes! Just then he realized that he had spent many hours at the beach and he had to return back home! Home? No it was not a home for him it was only four walls wherein he went to sleep... Taking a deep breath he tried to calm himself down although it was not possible and he knew this but just to show the world he wiped his tears, set his messy hair and walked off from there, to start another day, another war and to face another challenge that he knew was on its way.

To be continued...

            Thinking who is that 'he'??? Most of you must have guessed it! If not keep thinking!
            So everyone here is the first chapter of my first ever work of fiction. Please do tell me what you feel about it. Do feel free to point out my mistakes so that i can improve them. Am no professional writer and so i know that i must have made innumerable mistakes. I just tried to do something my heart told me to. I have no idea about how it is. Now it's up to you all to rate my work. And yeah most importantly do tell me if you want me to continue or not? It will be your decision and not mine about the future of this story.

9 comments:

  1. Strange that many viewed but none commented.

    Dear u wrote the story, screenplay and dialogues as well. Only u need two things. Camera & Cast.
    Hope cast of this story is our team and no body else.

    I know who is that person standing. Quite easy guess.
    We h have made me madly waiting for the chapter 2. Send in an autograph at the last of this series. I am the first one to ask n u ought yo give me first.

    Don't know after becoming an acclaimed writer u will give me ur autograph or Not ����

    This one is fanastic superb. N u YEES I WANT U TO CONTINUE AND DO WANT TO READ THE NEXT CHAPTER.

    great aspuring talent u r dear. Lovly ����������������

    God bless.��

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  2. Thank u so much for this lovely comment. And autograph! Dear am no such personality that you are asking for an autograph... Its only a small effort that i made and am glad that you all are liking it. Talking about the cast... Its our very own beloved CID team in my imagination. You all are liking my efforts and so am continuing it. I definitely will and i promise that the chapter 2 will come up very soon

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  3. On ur request i read 1nce mre. And u know what happened. I am loving it even even more. Are yaar rula dogi tum mujhe. The episode has already started in my brain. Ohh i cant take it. Shridhar sir plz make this story hapen in real. I m just dying. Reall awsome😂😂😭😭😭😭😭

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    1. Thank u so much for the praises dear😊... And if this story comes in real in CID i will the happiest person on the planet... Thanks again and keep reading

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  4. Wow.... Interesting beginning..... Excited to read further....
    Hope it won't be tragic story.

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    1. Thanks... And this is something that i can commit... It's my first story and i promise it won't be tragic... Will post the next chapter soon. Keep reading 😊

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  5. Great start �� Quite interesting �� 'He' is Abhijeet i guess �� and he's guilty but for what?���� May be something wrong with daya?? Or something wrong b/w duo?? �� aah lots of thoughts in my mind right now.. So it's better to read next chapter without wasting time in guessing ����
    Well i like the way of ur writing..Scene description was gud.. I'm imagining his messy hair and how he set his hair ���� my fav scene ���� and yes thank u dear for duo story..actually i was waiting to read duo stuff n finally I get something interesting..bdw Nice Title 'Heart vs Brain'����

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    1. Thanks😊... And good guess work i must say... Happy that you liked this chapter... But I didn't get your review for the next chapters... Any reason you would like to share?! Once again thanks😊

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  6. hey there excellent writing, also made me emotional, best wishes and yes i am now your fan 👍👍 leep writing ahead PARTH

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